Escapades

Thoughts writhing

Memories fading

Good battling bad

Emotions erupting

Secrets trying to escape

My future being paved

These are the escapades of my mind

Author's Note

This is my first official poem, I hope you like it :)

Reviews

[nono]

I like it but, I have one question...Were you trying to rhyme because if you were then you should change the ending...don't mean to criticize I hate that and I hate myself more when i do it. But all in all it's very very nice especially for being your first official poem. Hope to see more of it in the future. Nice job!! >_

[Ruth]

I like it a lot, concise and powerful!
xx

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good first poem. I like the strength in the words. I like the final line. A very good first poem.
Coyote

[Joshua Donahue]

i like it. short and to the point and very well-written. nice.

[Gracie-San]

I liked it. It gave you a mental picture in your head and was very simple, yet effective.

Good job.

[Nianque]

Good Job, Keep up the great work.

[Marshall Hanson]

Not bad. Very short yet as sarah said it's thought provoking. Keep up the good work.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

pin points of descriptive thought streams captivating in concise form~ very well presented and written~

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. your first official poem is definitely intriguing and thought-provoking ... minimalistic but skillfully so ...