Chaos.

 

Everything was so confusing,

Blurry lights- blue, red, blue, red

People screaming;

It was all I could hear.

My vision was fading;

My eyes slowly closing.

I opened my mouth to tell the people not to worry,

But nothing came out.

My heart faltered to a stop.

No more thump thump thump in my chest.

My legs were numb.

I couldn’t move them.

I was going to die.

Author's Note

Critique?

Reviews

[tomboy]

Sad but in a good way. Extremely good. Short and nice.

[Jetta Zippora]

Wow! Amazing write! (standing ovation) :)

[Violet Rose]

The beginning definitely captured the chaos and confusion I think you wanted, especially the allusion to the red and blue lights - that was absolutely amazing. The end had a chilling effect as well. Good job.