Air.

 

Her air was cut off.

She was suffocating.

She could not breathe without him.

He left her in this way.

She was dying

Dying when he should die.

Dying in the place of him.

Dying.

Author's Note

Critique?

Reviews

[We are young.]

very well written, and full of meaning. and depressive, but I like that.

[Violet Rose]

It sounds like the chorus to a break up song.

Also, my inner English teacher is crying, "Dying, not dieing!!!"

The title was perfect for the poem. I envy a person that can conjure just the right word or two to capture the heart of his or her poem. Great job there.

You know what they say, luv. "The fastest way to a man's heart is through his chest." Preferably with a very sharp object.