Dark Cloud

My feelings for you were once to deep

but now when I see you I feel this dark cloud come over me.

I feel anger stewing inside.

I feel hurt coming by me.

I feel the past creeping to me.

I cared so much.

And all you cared about was what people thought

And what other girls you could flirt with.

You were a player.

You never took a time out,

always stayed in the game,

without shame.

You were like broken glass.

until you shattered.

You were once so sweet.

I really cared.

But now when I see you...

I feel darkness and hate.

Your like a dark cloud.

Reviews

[Amanda]

Thanks. Your right.. i did spell it wrong! i was in a hurry because i was messaging you over facebook!

[Ki]

This is good!
I care about you, so I will give you some constructive criticism.
You spelled coming incorrectly.
I would recommend staying consistent with end punctuation as well A's capitalization.