Forbidden Dream

Style Encouraged by http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/watchtheworld/636482/ For http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Get-published!-GLBT-COMMUNITY/13834/ About a gay boy and his dreams :(

Just a few nights ago,

In a castle far away,
My dreams were hospitalized so sweetly,
During the absence of                             day.

There I met my Knight in Shining Armor,
So strong and brave he was.
A beautiful sight to behold;
His attitude a rarity under the street-      light.

He didn’t know my secret;
Why no one did.
I didn’t speak the words,
For a single word                                   brings

The pain of a thousand suns,
Or the coup of my mind by pests.
After all, I’m not like other boys.
But most of all, I feared                          reality

                     Of waking up, away from forbidden desire.

Author's Note

Well here's my first GLBT poem. Enjoy!

Reviews

[Kiri Nells]

This poem can take on so many meanings. As I read it, I did not have in mind the sort of thing that you did as the poet. Yet, once I read your author's note, I fully understood the intent. I also commend you on your use of structure. It's creative, yet simple to figure out. Thank you so much for posting this poem, I very much enjoyed it. :)

[akihsna]

It's just beautifully written. And from the structure to the flow, everything is just so pretty. I really enjoyed the read and you indeed deserve a review!
And being a LGBT related poem, I can feel that forbidden desire you wanted to share.
Just wonderful :)
Keep up the good work.

[BigBoyJohn]

Excellent writing :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Good poem with an unusual structure,Good work.

[IAmGhost120]

I like the formatting of this poem. Great meaning; great word choice.

[Kim]

like the setup of this, Enjoyed the write...wonderful write.

[Anthony]

Just - beautiful. One word describes this moving poem perfectly. I love it.

[The Unknown Rose]

interesting

[Siena - Silent Awakenin..]

This is wonderful, I love it! Especially the 'daylight brings reality' it makes the reader really connect with the poem. A really good piece... Thanks for sharing.

[stars are far]

Nice poem
and i enjoyed :D

[Brenden Moran]

Not only is the poem good in itself, but your presentation says everything. Good job.