Mermaid Dog

 

I’ve seen the ugliness in beauty,

And I’ve seen the beauty in pain.

I’ve seen someone die in total grace,

And I’ve lived a thousand angry deaths.

I’ve seen the change,

From love to hate to indifference to pity

To sex to lust to dreams and back to love again,

In a blink of an eye

I’ve seen circles, squares, stars, moons,

Lips, breasts, fangs and claws

 

I had a dog that loved me,

And then she bit me, the B***h.

I once found a mermaid, who kissed me,

I held her and thought, that this must be every mans wish,

Then she went into a cocoon,

And turned into a piranha fish

Where was I?

Oh, the answer,

I don’t know,

I never quite understood the question.

 

Reviews

[John McGrael]

oh this poem is awesome!!!

the line where u called that dog a b***h made me smile :)

and the line, "From love to hate to indifference to pity" (excluding the line after it), is how my relationship with my dad has gone
i was surprised with how accurately that transformation is described in such a simple line
that line either took a lot and a lot of thinking about it, picking the perfect words
or it came to you in a second and you were like, "nice!!, i really like that line!!, and its perfect!!"
(or thats how i am... i dunno if anyone else is like that)

[The Raven King]

What I like the best about this is the word placement. Your syntax is great on this one. this poem sounds like it's having more fun than the subject matter implies.

[Lauren Marie]

I love the concept and the deep thinking you put into this piece.

"mans wish" should be "man's wish"?

Great job on the poem!
~Lauren

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Well written piece

[BLACKCRUSH]

"I once found a mermaid , who kissed me

I held her and thought, that this must be every mans wish

Then she went into a cocoon,

And turned into a piranha fish".
Wow this is incredible , one of your best as far as imagery.Your pieces never lack in creativity im adding it to my favs , well done.

[deeps]

I had a dog that loved me,
And then she bit me, the B***h.
I once found a mermaid, who kissed me,
I held her and thought,
that this must be every mans wish,
Then she went into a cocoon,
And turned into a piranha fish

I so loved these lines here
This is amazing write, I liked this alot.
very well written and i like the emotionin this
It makes me want to say "Ouch!"

[Sean M. Addams]

very nicely done and very interesting piece.... like the concept of this alot.... overall nice job on this one!!!

[Perry]

wow, that was an awesome read. Words and feelings from my own soul.. Thanks for sharing!