A pen in my hand

A pen in my hand,
Twitching and twirling
Thinking of it's use
In my mundane hand

"Oh write something", it says
Something useful, something purposeful,
Something nice, something unburdening

Use me!
Oh I am no use twitching and twirling
In your worthy hand

I said, "I am on it, my friend
No use twitching and twirling you
When I have nothing to say
Will keep you still and
Writing when my thoughts play

It's not I who is worthy but you
Who put my words to say.. "

Reviews

[Carthage Thorne| The Wi..]

This is a very neat poem you have here. Thoughtful and also personifies almost the pen, giving it a desire to wish to write and no longer be of "no use." Also shows the perfect example of the thinking process, and gives way to an idea that there may or... may not be something. Nicely done!

Only thing I would possibly consider is cutting out that forth line in the first stanza... not necessarily needed though I can understand if you feel it gives more impact to keep it and if so, then do so and change nothing.

[Shweta]

Cool... Wonderful to know what you felt and appreciate your review and generous words.. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Interesting you give the pen the might when it is human to weild such a weapon of 'war'. Never-the-less an interesting piece as the protagonist struggles to write.

[BlackPrince]

I absolutely love the humorous (and true) dialogue between writer and pen.

Well done

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i relate to this really wise poem...i feel like a conduit, never really responsible for what i write.
the pen just starts moving, or my fingers over the keys...and it all comes out...
i feel so lucky to get to do this...
and i don't know how i became worthy of getting to write in the first place.

my mundane pen, my mundane fingers...
but the results? can be surprising...
mostly to me.
thanks for this.
j.

[NotUsinganymore]

Very wonderful poem! it was great!

[Shweta]

Thank you JungLee... Appreciate your read and review!!

[Chris]

We want sooo hard to be noticed and memorable and not just taking up space and resources.

[Shweta]

Even a pen! Well they deserve it.. Thank you Chris :)

[Perdition]

Even when we don't write..we write. Strange but helpful isn't it. I like this one...a pen talking to the poet and saying it is not worthy enough. "Something unburdening"..think ya nailed that part. Thanks for the early read.

[Shweta]

Thanks for showing up and reviewing.. Is always a pleasure to know what you feel about the write... When not writing, the thoughts and words play on its own accord without a source or destination. That's for me. In your case it might be different. Great to know your perspective :) have a great day/evening

[Perdition]

In my case the sleeves burst into flames and I set off most electrical appliances nearby while trying to direct the sparks emanating from my eyes so no one gets hurt..lol. Welcome to poet's land huh ...It was my pleasure...and the same. Have a great day/evening as well.

[Shweta]

Lol.. You seem to spellbind me with your imagery! That's something..