The Girl In The Forest

This short story is about a person who is being chased by a demon at night, in a forest, and this person cant find their way out.

     

    Sweat rolling down my face. I'm in the forest... at night. I can't find my way out. And I'm running, running fast. I hear dead drop silence but I know she's coming and I know she's watching... she's always watching. I slowly turn back and there she is. Her long white dress and her long black hair that covers her face sends a chill down my spine. She's charging at me but I can't move.

Author's Note

Please be honest and tell me what I need to improve or what you really liked about this short story. This is my first post. Thank You

Reviews

[matrixmark]

Pretty damn cool my friend. You should badly follow this up....or is it a prologue for things to come.

Mark.

[XxBrokenAngel14xX]

I would suggest not using the word "I" so much if you're writing in first person. Rather, lay out the scene through her eyes. Decorative description is key.