The grey...

Crash!!! Where is she?

Grey grey swirling in,

Is she is trapped? She is nowhere!

She tries to turn back,

But grey grey churning in!

No gates to return, are there any?

But she will fight, yes she must,

Yes a gateway, afar she can glimpse

Barely discernible in the brume,

She sprints and trips, up and runs,

The gate is ajar barely a flap,

She squeezes and arrives, yes her home,

But , Hazy hazy the view

Vague is where she came from

She craves to touch to sense

Flesh earth grass and steel

But no she cant she can’t

Better to depart she thinks

Flustered she returns

Still grey grey everywhere

But hail, blue is that other side

Angels with wings seem to glide

Gazing at her in curiosity

Beckoning frantically” come”!

She strides and hastens

The silver archway she reaches

But locked is it, latched and chained

 She darts to the reverse side

Locked, shackled and bolted it is too!

Neither a mortal nor a soul

She has nowhere to go

Oh the grey the grey

Engulfs her, fences her within

She can’t depart either way

Entrapped she is in a wait evermore!

 

Author's Note

life after suicide, sudden death, near death experience??? something I perceived!

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Great stuff. The urgency of the word tumble is sustained from start to finish. I immediately felt locked in a dream twisting this way and that, just as dreams will in their puzzling ways. And yes there is often one predominating facet, grey in this case. There was a hint of salvation with the silver archway, hope. But, and this was the best part for me, the gate is locked. Getting behind it was sooooo typical of a dream! But to find it locked on the other side, too. THAT was a magical dab! Very strong, and terrifying too. I can imagine the soul of suicide finding the way forward to salvation barred and then finding the way back to life barred also. That is a terrifying thought. And all so urgent and immediate and real, just as those experience you note are for us.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Once you leave you can never come back so make your decisions wisely... a great interpretation of one of the greatest mistakes one can make.

[Seanne Tholltree]

intensely great...love it

[Sagar Waingankar]

Interesting to think about. Flow of feelings and your intense emotions can be felt in this write :O

[Cassie Fraga]

WOW!!!!! very intense!! love the flow on this... great write!!

[Manpreet]

extremely well penned thought. It shares what is unknown and only based on assumptions but the line " Entrapped she is in a wait evermore " takes this thought to yet another level of detail. Truly amazing work!

[JRB]

Death is only life’s way of saying its over, pack your bags; however, there are times when it just says hello, not yet, remember your begging

[Reaper]

very interesting.

[Alana McGuire]

Wow! You really have a way with words! I really like how it's intense and captivating from the beginning to the end, not boring at all! I love reading your writing. :)