Scraggly

Scraggly
old man
I be.
Many years
behind
me now.
Scraggly
old man
I be.
Toil,
hard work,
back
breaking work
only thing
I’ve ever
known.
Scraggly
old man
I be.
Children born
all grown up,
grandchildren
too.
Scraggly
old man
I be.
Scars of
life all over
me
can be
found.
Scraggly
old man
I be.
Scars
all over
me
outside
and in.
Scraggly
old man
I be.
Generations
just
like me.
Scraggly
old men
they were.
All ghosts!
Scraggly
old man
I be.
Years have
come,
years have
gone,
leaving
me in the
dust.
Scraggly
old man
I was.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a little too repetitive for my liking. I love your repeated phrase & I love some repeated refrains of it. But I think you've taken it a little too far. I like the way you use simple expressions & repetition to suggest a type of person who is old, simple-minded, & possibly repeating himself like old people do. The thing is, I find old people like this to be more interesting than those who seek attention (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[E.J. Waling]

Hi Barley Girl,

Thank you for reading my work.

JG

[Phill Oz O'fee]

It takes a 'Scraggle old man' to produce new generations; who eventually become more Scraggle old men and women that pass on their skills, personalities and cultures - great read and lovely write - can almost see a Scraggle old man's toothless grin... :-)

[E.J. Waling]

Hi Phill,

Thank you for reading my work.

JG

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Respect my friend … :-)