Prologue/Introduction

If I died today, who would care? Who would cry their eyes out, wanting nothing but for me to return? If I had to choose, I wouldn't have a soul to name. I don't have anyone who'd want me back, who could cry, I don't have anyone who cares. My dad's a drunk, my boyfriend's an abuser, and my mother is dead.

The day she died my life changed drastically for the worse. And what kills me inside every time I think of her is the fact that the day she died, just minutes before, I told her I hated.

Now, all i do is sit here in agony, wondering how my life would've been if she never died. Would I be happier? Would I have someone I could rely on? Someone who would actually miss me when I was gone?

Yes, things would have been much different, happier even.

Author's Note

Please, don't be too harsh on my writing. Ignore my grammar usage, I am aware it may need some tweaking here and there. PLEASE be honest with me, if you hate my story already I want to know why! And if you like it, I want to know why. I want to know what turns you on/off about it. Do I need to change something? Or maybe add something? (By add something I mean details, personality, etc..) Thank-You!

Reviews

[JCharo]

Ok..so far I only see two paragraphs. I don't know if this is an error on my part or if this is all you posted soooo I'm only basing critique on the two paragraphs that I see. So far, it seems like you are going to have a good YA novel going, one that alot of readers can relate to. What I would like to see is, instead of having the character going on this depressing rant take them (the reader) directly to a scene. The scene could be a specific example of the character's dad being a drunk or the day the character's motehr died. You have a good start here, I just would like to read more. Hope this helps
JC

[Wolf]

A strong base now wheres the body dont leave me hanging lol cant wait to see the rest keep up the good work.