I miss her

She was once mine

Our love was so strong and irresistible, day and night, every second we would be together for 6 years. She was my life, my everything... We built a future together in our home with our pets. We shared amazing moments that could never be forgotten. Until another girl came into the picture, an evil jealous person who wanted everything i had. She would use spells on my lover and on me. Which i found infront of my house. She destroyed my world.
Now my love is with her and i will do anything and everything to get her back.

Author's Note

Help me out with my situation

Reviews

[Nikki Richardson]

Um... As a real situation I have no idea what to say except true love will prevail.
This would be interesting as a longer story.

[Fernando Dardón]

A writing made by the hand of your feelings. Great job, I love it. It is pretty dark, nevertheless, I consider this was one of the best things you could have done, to write about your feelings.
For me, writing is way to drain all those negative experiences of life.
I know what heartbrake is, but it is not impossible to overcome it. A friend once told me "There is only one thing that has no solution, death. For everything else, there is always a way out" C'mon cheer up. ;)

[Fahmida]

Gosh!
This is so dark. short but powerful.

[papaed]

This is a little tough. Two responses. 1) As a real life situation: The title, the sub title, the author's note all ask for help with a situation so I'm led to think that this is really your feelings and that a separation is grieving you. If someone really believes another belongs to them, they are obsessing, infatuated, and filled with unrealistic expectations. It's a common paradigm for a passionate relationship in the early stages, but cannot last, because most people evolve and grow. Spells have power when we believe they do. No one can force another to feel or think or love along a controlled path. To try to get her back with force can only hurt all involved, and drive a stronger barrier between you. A strong, dominant, self-assured female may not be the personna that would win her back.
2) As a written summary, it is an old, old story and would need not only much personal, concrete, character building, but would require a few twists that surprise the reader. This subject is thousands of years old and probably the most written story line in print in the world. Even the Bible has so many stories, and variations on this story, with this plot line that it will take an intense talent developing many creative twists to turn it into a salable story. You may very well be able to do this. I'd enjoy reading your response. I'm being honest. Peace.

[Anchee]

This is a true story that is happening now as we speak.

[Raymond Federle]

Ok now I'm finding it hard to digest based on your above comment. I would keep things in a story medium exactly because of that. Some choose to believe and some don't. I find that a person loses readers when they are forced to make a choice of belief. Apparently this "story" has made it's way around the block with 250 views and 31 comments. This seems like an attention thing to me at this point and I say that because after time goes by you'd expect there to be.. well more to it. I'm not trying to be mean. Sorry. :(

[papaed]

So sorry you are going through this, but it's part of life for most passionate and creative people. I can tell you from experience that the rules I state above are true. It might be wise to write your feelings and experiences as they evolve. It truly could be an outline for a story. You are going through a grief process.

[Ms.Rhodes]

I absolutely love it, it's so powerful and filled with pure emotion, great writing I dig it :)

[Simona]

So sad.I hate my heart being broken.

[intuitivesoul]

Very dark, your pain emerged very well in this piece!

[Raymond Federle]

Hmmm, this sounds like a synopsis more than a beginning of a story. Was that what you were going for? I like the concept and it's definitely what's in the market place right now (Not that something like that is important, unless your going to write professionally.) and popular. I can't tell you how to write your story but I can tell you how I write mine.~~~ At some point I try to come up with a sexy, catchy title for my story not that those particular adjectives are the necessarily the one's you want but it's what works for me. You know your already going to have at least 3 main characters, always try to concentrate on them. It's easy to get side tracked with stories about lesser characters. You have some major components going for your story here though. LOVE, FAMILY, ANIMALS and a kick butt ANTAGONIST. Most of those, in my humble opinion, are needed for a truly great story. Don't know how your story is going to go but I try to limit the amount of flash backs I have in a story because sometimes that turns into just a lot of exposition which will probably come out later or I start to deal with time issues between the reader and the writing. Your on the right track here I think. Keep at it. Writing is infectious and pretty soon your story will have a life of it's own. Always willing to help. :)

[Cody Williams]

Such a sad poem! Heartbreak sucks! Writing is the best way to express our emotions! Thanks for sharing it!

-CW

[Baby Ricochet]

Heartbreak is a b***h/////////