he loves me not

he loves me,

he loves me not,

his lies,

i mistakingly bought,

his glistening eyes,

torment my mind,

clouding my thoughts,

four petals left,

he loves me,

he loves me not,

he loves me,

to bad he was caught

Reviews

[stars are far]

i loved that so much
and sure he loves me not :)

[Tasha]

i loved this! i loved how she was pluking flowers and saying "he loves me, he loves me not" the ending was my favorite part: "to bad he was caught".
this scene you created could be in a music video. i loved it.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Love it, short, simple and to the point with a huge powerful message, I would make one small change though, "clouding my every thought", i would change to "clouding my thoughts", just a suggestion, well done

[Vanessa Rico]

I loved how you took the little girl pasttime of plucking flower petals, trying to see if a certain boy likes them. I was not expecting the end, either! This was a creative poem...and yes it was too bad that he was caught!