In the Shadows He Waits

Love is in the shadows

He beckons to me,

 

He lingers by,

 

This face I constantly see.

 

Sometimes sweet,

 

Sometimes strange,

 

But we never did meet.

 

He hides in the shadows,

 

He whispers in my mind,

 

A thought that tickles with time,

 

"earnesty”

 

and  a mystified love rhyme.

 

He beckons to me,

 

He lingers by,

 

His face I constantly see,

 

In the shadows  I know he waits for me.

 

 

 

Author's Note

I'm a little sketchy about the ending.. So i'm up for suggestions.. Please be critical (:

<3 Andrea

Reviews

[Enigma]

I think the ending was perfect. Its simple and that's why all the more beautiful.

[Cassie Fraga]

wouldn't change the ending at all... that was a very simple but beautiful write of a longing. keep it up!!

[joshua deathdealer]

Nice. I love the imagery..xx

[Seshat Nidaba]

Yes it's quite seductive really, you are right the ending is sorta cliche. Hmm, perhaps a more mysterious ending altogether would be better?

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Maybe," In the shadows awaiting me?"... I love this poem, very mysterious...Nice write!

[Inyourshadow]

Nothing wrong with the ending gives it a bit of eerie mystery as is he a scared suitor or a stalker. Nice use of imagery and something drew me to choose this piece not sure what lol. Keep em' coming

[stars are far]

This was so nice ...well done :)