A Love Story Gone Wrong

This is an attempt to express the short fling between two people of opposite sex.

How can I not love you, young lady?

You have the fragrance of a flower

A cute, innocent face with those rosy smile

Your elegance caught my heart, mind, and soul

The lady replies I'm not flattered by your love proposal

I have my own dreams to fulfill

And need not divert my attention to love

Your love seem a pretense

And I have no time for it young man

So you better find another lady

Not knowing whether it hurt him or was it an attack to his ego

He fled away to a place unknown

Thus, gone a love story wrong!

Author's Note

What do you think of this short conversation?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

As I read V1, I was thinking: my gawd! this guy sounds like a joke! who would buy such crap? So I was joyous to get to V2, where your heroine said as much, except in a much nicer way, but still, with no uncertainty. Some women say "no" in a way that makes a guy keep trying, almost like she really wants him to beg. But other women say "no" in a way that makes sure a guy isn't going to keep trying. This is the way I would do it. I love that your poem makes this into a fun demonstration (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Anjali]

Thank you Margie for expressing your honest thoughts on my writing. And yes, this was a fun demonstration I wrote impromptu.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometimes. No time for love. Love need time and effort. I liked your honest thoughts and the honest answer. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry for love that went north. And you went south.
Coyote

[Anjali]

Thank you Coyote for your kind words.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Anjali.

[Charlie]

It's okay. Not really deep or says anything new.

[Anjali]

Thank you, Charlie, for reviewing my writing.