You & Me

Really very choppy...Any ideas how this could be improved would be much appreciated."

Feel like I'm waiting for you to

see me

Waiting for you to

hear me.

 

But you don't care.

 

Waiting for you to

hear my cry

see my face...

 

But your back is turned.

 

Turned on the world

coming to an end.

Turned on me

waiting for you.

 

no end.

only eternity.

Of you.

Of me.

 

waiting...

 

I love you

Reviews

[Wildecat]

Can't proclaim your love any plainer than that. Nice write.

[KristaK]

The mood is really obvious in this poem... I wonder... was it written with anyone in mind?