Complications

Crappy poem i just came up with. 31Aug09

 

The Love of many,

Conceals the love of one

I watch from the shadows

They watch the darkness

I look for the one

They look for the fun

I am alone

For they cannot bear

The love I wish to give in care

So now I lay all alone

While they condone

The pressure of society...

Reviews

[Aussie]

Ahhh,the joys and pains of the love of many and the love of 'the one'.
Another fantastic piece. Going in my library.

[gimpy]

alone such a harsh word yet it describes so many so many that have surrounded them selvs in a desprit attempt to blind in but being alone despite what people say is not caused by a lack of socialization but true anger true hate that none can understand an ethenal darkness cloaked with a mask of happiness secreats covered by lies this my friend is truly being alone but alas I am a boy of only 13 years of age and my opinion counts for very little

[Avoiry]

I think i get what your saying that a single love is hidden by the worldly love and unstable love of others. Though sometimes that unstable love of the world is what truly sets you free. This is a nice piece and i love the beginning.

[Kristin Brecoe]

nope. it's not bad. =] maybe break the first line into two. =]