Me and all my mother’s children

A poem to all my brothers and sisters

My mother bore entities
Quintessential articles of purity
To her, unparalleled centerpiece
7 sources of salubrity

My mother bore embodiments
Of all that is angelic
Divinity incarnate
So utterly mesmeric

My mother bore her whole heart
From the burgundy blood in her veins
And with that she does impart
Her love, loss, joy and pain

My mother bore my beloveds
The basis of my adherence
My brothers and sisters designed
Through genomic confluence

My mother bore celestials
Forces of seraphic light
And to all my mothers children
Dead and alive
We will once again unite

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is brilliant, highly-original writing! When I first started, I felt your writing to be a little too cerebral - that is, more analytical than sensory (a little bit of a deterrent). But as I read on, I found your style to be irresistible, even if you are mostly writing from a mental point of view. It's becuz your way of seeing & analyzing is so unusual & fresh & interesting, I had to let go of my usual expectations. I love it when a poet includes a repetitive aspect to the construction, yet also varying it slightly to great effect (first lines of your stanzas). Thanks for sharing your very unusual way of seeing family relationships! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Aphitenza]

Thank you for your very constructive review !
I wrote it in a way that could express how highly I see my mother and her children,, I wanted to make it seem more factual than poetic in a way, to add a different poetic aspect,, this aspect is one that could paint a picture of maybe “mothers children” as the reader read on to make them seem less as human, but more divine as defendants of my mother as I see her as an immense gift from God himself.

Again, thank you for the review ((HUGS))

[barleygirl]

I'm glad you explained your intention, it really helps me see your poem better!

[Rama]

Aphitenza,
Very good salutation to a Great Mother!! Stay Blessed!
Rama