Hope©

alone, hope

Left alone in a world so dark and empty,
Struggling in hopes that the sun will soon find me.
To take the pain of what you left,
A feeling that left me weak and deaf.
Trying to find a soul to reconnect,
A feeling so wrong from the day we met.
But alone right now is where I must be,
To find what I lost in your black sea.
My love was a blank hopeful state of mind,
I took my chances at what I could find.
But in the end nothing stays the same,
Now my lonely heart is all that remains.
But in this small dark place in time,
I try to be strong and content in my mind.
 

Reviews

[Nish Nish the Fish]

your style reminds me of how i used to write a few years ago,
it's very "to the point" and "straight up"
you definitely have that sense of "deepness" i think you should look into the concept of imagery a bit more, put in more that will put pictures in readers' minds.
i love reading pieces about hope, this was nicely done and reassuring.
good job!
you've got a lot of potential, i can tell, keep writing, keep improving!