Demons

This piece may not make a lot of sense. It was just what ended up on the paper.

I’m not suicidal. I just feel idle.
A void within my space and time.

I make no sense,
Isn’t that evidence,
That I have lost my mind?

Trapped in a puzzle.
My thoughts a constant riddle.
No one would take
The ride.

I’m not suicidal.

My feelings are justifiable.
I know how I feel inside.

It’s really undeniable,

That I should be liable,
For the demons I try to hide.

 

©3-13-2015 by Ashley Nicole Nordyke

Reviews

[closed]

the tortured artist
I think many of us can attest to this one

that feeling of being vindicated
'above all else

poignant

-Dream

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you Dream..

[Demii]

I like the honesty in the piece, but I felt you could of written it with more emotion or detail, only because I've seen your skills, good job.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

I love this piece, very unique in style witty yet easy to read well done keep writing

[Nini]

Wow. A piece that most, if honest, can relate to at one time or another in their life. Nicely done dear!! One of my favorites thus far!

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you Nini. Glad you like it!

[Chris]

I like this one - reminds me of me

[....................]

A well-written piece indeed. We all try to hide demons and sometimes people get the wrong ideas about what we are doing because we can be so restless.

Trapped in a puzzle.
My thoughts a constant riddle.
No one would take
The ride.

I like these lines a lot for they describe what I (and many of us I am sure) feel sometimes. Nice write.

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you FT!

[AaronFreitas]

Very interesting piece... I like these kind of writes because they are confusing, dark and cryptic yet they are the thoughts drowning the happiness in your heart at the moment. Good work on this piece.

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thanks Aaron.. It just came out. Not sure how or why.. lol

[andrew mitchell]

A haunting tale where your not feeling okay but you have to justify your thoughts .. my first impression. nice work as usual.

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you Andrew. Yeah it was like I'm feeling dark but not dark enough to be mad at myself. Make sense?