Hollywood boy

(Remember The Days Of The) Old Schoolyard

Hollywood boy.

I was always sure my middles would get wide and I knew you didn’t like that, because you said to me once oh “look how she’s just ridden her arse right off” when she joined the mounted police force, and I saw your lips quiver and how wet your tongue was (18 was so silly I was no exception, I should have traded half your confidence for the zero of my own, you would have done a deal like that, cause you never really ever seemed to lose). Oh I knew you loved upstanding, cause she joined the force right after she left the force of you and her and her and you and I never thought I could be upstanding, not like that, not like she always was. I never quite knew what to do when you called me a breath of fresh feminine in your home when you had only just remarried the next divorce and I was shouting god I love you, only it was a shout on the inside.. I should have just kissed you back then crazy like the night you woke me with your hand over my mouth and arm around my shoulders and I didn’t know who you were for a while but that was such a wonderful fright and to hell with all I thought and you thought and they thought, you, me, in her bed before you went off to live that crazy dream you caught, at least I could have said (though you know I wouldn’t have).. Once, once that man rode a black mare called lady and played a Winchester, he was mine, and boy what a gentleman.

 

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

Wham, bam, play it again Sam...play it again Sam. This piece reads with an intense frenzy that grabs at you, pulling you into the roller-coaster of emotion and thought presented with such rip-roaring momentum. It has that feel of old Hollywood dialogue, with the excited delivery and conveyed meaning. It is hard to believe that it as long as it is, after having felt the rush of it. This was a distinct pleasure to read.

[J]

You're rather wild on the inside.
Yes, ma'am.

[Rosie E C…]

I could hear your voice reading this to me in my head to show this write is meaningful to you. It describes a man going backwards and forwards in relationship. I don't really believe men should do this in a relationship I ahve always liked to see a man sticking with the same woman for the rest of his life. But this reveals the dark side of love and marriage. It has given me experiance of how some men can be difficult in relationships

[J. Marc]

I found this piece extremely intimate and without your delicate words it could have been voyeuristic, but, what a piece of writing!!!!!

[Gandré]

This was very intense! I totally loved this. Such an innocence... in those feelings.
I am positively "envy" for you live in this beautiful Australia.. well I am not an envy person, this is more longing for such an environment. Look at this tree, I thought... and she lives there... must be experience, even I know that bush is hard and life can be difficult anywhere...

[cest la vie]

My first read of your writes, and this is incredible..
The speed, words, content, internal dialogue..
well it just zooms and I like zooming pieces.
Very well done!!

[Collect-Eye]

Holy Crap..this may just be the most intense thing I've ever read..I've nothing more to say besides I love it!

[theludus]

I think that you are the biz, the shizz nizz for writing this.

clarity issues aside, and i think there are some clarity issues, this is great.
if it were mine i'd put it on page one of the book.

[Ed Hart]

I wouldn't want to be running in front of your gun. This is straight shooting; just f*****g great!

[Emily B]

oh, my . . . a whirlwind of something that I can't quite describe, but I felt it in that place . . . I felt it and wondered what it would be like just once

[a donkey, briefly]

I think Shakespeare said it better than I ever could.
“The prince of darkness is a gentleman”
and I agree w/ what the writer on either side of me said. I'm not trusting my own thoughts until further notice.