Six Days to Sunday

paralytic dreams no. 5

I cast my burden upon the vaguely seen and unseen unforeseeable future,

but how much could my paralytic dreams reveal to me,

have i truly obtained a seers eye,

or am i just an eagle who envisions from an outlaying distance

without clearly defining anything until it becomes imminent,

if so then i shall forever remain a slave to time,

fading away in its evanescent elision. 

Author's Note

what do you think of it.

Reviews

[MadalaJose]

well, sounds philosophical. I sense a theme of uncertainty and the persona trying to decide whether he is in control or everything that happens to him is caused. sort of a free will vs determinism debate. that's why i said its philosophical. I like your thinking

[Quill]

thanks for your review

[zunie frost]

Very well written... Love reading it!!!

[S.F]

Your choice of words is really good and sophisticated, it really makes you think.

[Quill]

glad you think of it that way, thank you

[Shanelle Morgana]

I like the diction,and the poem itself stands out for its unique format.

[Audrey Murray]

interesting use of words do eagles really think about the future i echo yje lament of being a slave to time

[Quill]

the eagle is metaphoric for how unsure the poet is about the future, eagles can spot things from afar they know something is there but they cannot tell what it is until they come closer, hence, the future is not clear

[Mosunmola Adeniyi]

Nice poem! It has some touchy vibes in it, it's so logical that a only deep thinker can sail through.

[Quill]

thank you so much i'm glad you think so highly of it, again thanks

[Moustache]

Very relatable. Describes the plights of some people that go through mental stresses.

[L. Michelle Corp]

This is deep with meaning. To be understood it must be read with care and with the respect it deserves. Great poem.

[Quill]

thank you ;)

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Well it s very poetic with words of wisdom and clarity. Keep writing.

[Quill]

well i do appreciate the encouragement