You're In The Stars

The song of a damsel whose true love was killed fighting a monster and immortalized in the stars for his past heroic deeds. Taking responsibility for his death, she seeks to bring him back to life.

Verse 1

Since I lost you

I’ve forgotten

Everything you were

But I have to

Wonder within

If there’s still a cure.

 

Verse 2 

How can love be

Everlasting

If I’m without you?

Taken from me

There is nothing

To carry me through.

 

Chorus 

I can see you looking down at me,

Your figure shining brightly in the stars.

Please return to earth and set me free

Or give me a sign so I can heal these scars.

 

Bridge 

Can I still save you?

Should I even try?

Are you worth fighting for?

Now what will I do

If I don’t know why

I even failed before?

 

Verse 3 

I suppose now

I’ll keep searching

Until I can know

How to allow

My own loving

Heart to let you go.

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

It reads very well, as I was humming it while reading I felt the feelings that the speaker felt... Such sweet and touching work... Perfectly balanced word choices...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Lyingwithlions]

Wow!! That is amazing. The chorus is beautul. It has feeling of a great and profund loss.

The Title is what caught my eye. :)

Looking foward to reading more.

[livetowrite]

brillant so much feeling. can i hear the song somewhere with the music

[Matt DeFranco]

The last verse is culminates the rest very well. Great flow!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A touching and relaxed piece, well done.

[James]

I see pain through the waning strength of a woman. If a Greek foreshadowing were involved I sense a wife waiting for her long lost husband to come home from battle.

[Kawaiikitty96]

I love the rhyming technique you used. To me, the first two verses sound like the speaker is mourning a breakup while the chorus, bridge, and verse three sound more like she's mourning the passing of a loved one.

[Sami Khalil]

I’ll keep searching

Until I can know

How to allow

My own loving

Heart to let you go.
This is some beautiful write...:)

[Arthur Crow]

"Are you worth fighting for?"

A question which I needed to read today.

I really enjoyed this poem, every line spoke to me.. it's timeless and well crafted.
Emotions well expressed!

[Jemma]

Good lyrics.
Fits well and has a clear message.
Would love to hear it sung with some music.
I got a question for you >.< If you could have someone or someones play it for ya who would it be?
I guess i'm just curious on what style you would make it out to be.
Nice write >.