Storm is coming

You should see the sky.
Dark and stormy,
all lights gone out,
as water comes down.
Smell the air,
hide inside.
The storm's coming,
to wipe it all out.

You should be inside,
stop yourself,
because the weather reflects,
your every emotion.
See the lightning,
angrily streaking.
The thunder screaming,
a mirror of you.

you should see outside,
twisted and broken.
Abused by the weather
a great mess to fix.
Feel the atmosphere,
oppresively clamy.
Your pain expressed
in ever downpour.

Reviews

[RosaliaSky]

This is a very expressive piece and I know how you feel in the first stanza, I remember hiding in my basement when there was a hurricane outside. Outside wasn’t twisted and broken but this helps me imagine what it could be like. Very descriptive and I love the relations to emotions. Great personification.

[Heather Anne]

Thanks a lot :) it must be a little scary living in a hurricane zone.

[Athina]

Amazing! the use of words are playful but still shows your emotion. I like your use of words and the use of storm where it expresses your feeling.. I love the rhyming.

[FireFly]

I really like your use of the storm as a metaphor for emotions. Favorite lines: "The thunder screaming, a mirror of you." It definitely made me think..I love reading writing about storms (mostly because storms are my favorite kind of weather), but I have never read something quite like this before. Well done!

[Heather Anne]

Thanks so much!