Dump was I

There are times that we almost forgot to think for our self and ended up for nothing after giving up everything.

Dump was I.
        For letting the time die.
                       From three till' dusk.
                                 Even knows for an empty cask.

Author's Note

Just few lines I got here and hope you will get my point.

Reviews

[RomaJ]

Well what I see is and I could be wrong... Any way it seems like, someone took "things"for granted...ahem
and got "dumped" and is now drinking in sorrowful regret...:)

I do love this little write..very succinct and intriguing...

[Ashadan]

thanks for the compliment =)

[George Peck]

a little short but good just seems like it could have had a little more. thanks sharing

[Ashadan]

thank you for reading this and for reviewing my work =)

[cloakedone]

ok this was a confusing peice and it doesnt have any structure

[Ashadan]

i did it on purpose my friend. Thanks for your review =)

[cloakedone]

oh ,i cleary see that and nothing to it

[RiverRei]

I get what you're trying to say, but it wasn't all that clear to me...is English your second language?

[Chris McKnight]

Short, great and deep. Keep Writing.

[Ashadan]

thanks for reviewing this my friend =)

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work my friend... definitely got the message.

[Saddam]

Short yet to the point.
Sometimes seldom thoughts proves its power.

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

A short but deep poem. I don't know why but it somehow gives off vibes of a relationship having a bad end or maybe that's just my imagination. :) Anyway, I like the way you call yourself ''dump''. I might have gone for ''dumb'' but ''dump'' is much, much better to explain the worthlessness you're feeling for having wasted valuable time. A great poem. Four lines with such deep meaning! The poem totally sums up your regret and gives a lesson to the readers as well. Great work! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice description create vision and thoughts. You said enough in the short poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ashadan]

you are always welcome =)

[B]

I like it

Nice and simple

Time is so valuable

[Ashadan]

absolutely true. I glad to hear that you like it =)