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the knead
of your thumb
climbs my inner thigh
while you arrive
at the peak of my pelvis
with your other palm
    stirring an avalanche--
our chest cavities
ascend together
my every luscious echo
reverberating inside you
grows louder each time
    your exploration
carrying my curves
to uncharted heights--
the apex
of my breath
    higher
and
    higher
to the brink of my collapse--
    all around you
I plummet.

Author's Note

any and all suggestions welcomed

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

This transcends down the lines...
you give the effect in stages...
and towards the middle to the end...
this just breaks like glass...

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of description. Allowed the reader to feel the thoughts and journey to good places and emotion. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[ron]

Simply beautiful and sensual. A breathless read.