i have no problems with any but that of repitition

A tree in bloom

 at near high noon 

in the middle of the season

a finch it chirps 

a crow it caws

but neither without reason

a desert hot 

or converse cold 

both can hold life

oh how i wish

to be a bird

careless without strife

Reviews

[M. Hassen]

Excellent. Personally, I would change "but neither without reason" to "but neither without a reason" to break up the double stress withOUT REAson and match the 8 syllables of "in the middle of the season."

[Bala Gorthi]

What a wish! To be bird careless without strife.
A desert hot
Or converse cold
Both can hold life
Loved ever word of this write..Very beautiful write indeed..
Keep sharing..