Bone Chilling

Losing the one you love....

To picture a love unfinished

Broken by the relentless tug of gravity’s strings

Unwoven by the sour fates of destined rib cages   

It’s enough to make the heart bleed a ghastly red

Singeing the soul with each hollow drop 

Filling the lungs with dust and sand

Each breath an hourglass left unturned

To picture a love unfinished

A nightmare my eyes never wish to behold

 

Reviews

[Erica Daubert]

this is short, but very powerful. When your heart is broken, it's definitely hard to feel whole again. The first opening line is my favorite. I instantly knew how to relate to that, because I know along with many other that I have that exact way. This is great.

[SimiGirl]

This is a great poem. The pain and anguish is real with the imagery and chose of words. I loved it.

[skigirl]

WOW! It seemed like you put a lot of heart into it. Hope to read more. Post comments on mine if you could!

[Andrea Vargas]

This was a short yet very jaw dropping poem. You managed to capture an intence emotion thats is just exquisite. Great write

[Saisha]

great job! very powerful in less words.
love the profound depth of the imagery.
keep writing.

[paradise]

great job it is very short but is very powerful and goes straight to the point very well done great read. It had such a force and the way it flowed and was represented is great fantastic job. The meaning of it all was amazing and the reference was a great way to right a poem.