Sunday evening

Overflowing messages

with sun faded pick-up lines

rebuffing compliments

of people who claim to know me

silence from your end

a true Siberian dead zone

until the vastness congeals

in you smiling

resting easy

tapping the sheets to show me

or to acknowledge

that I too

need to be in that bed

Reviews

[Antoñyo]

Ha! knew I was right after that last read. This is just great.

"It gets you in a lot of legal trouble or ... it gets you in a poem ;) " Great line!

Thanks for the share

[asdarkeyesclose]

I liked how this is slightly off beat. lots of unexpected thoughts and ideas. fantastic.

[Michael G. Smith]

Your verses are like streams of dreams.

[Chris]

Those last lil nothings to do before realizing or at least admitting - even to yourself - it's time. The poem wasn't confusing, how to comment toward it ...was.

[A.Lack.of.Hope]

Hahaha
people really don't know how to take no for an answer do they! I think everyones experienced that at some point in time or another!

[FlatLineBeauty]

Very nice. haha I liked it

[Luke L]

haha was this about people hitting on you? hilarious! "sun faded pick-up lines"

[Audrey Rey]

I don't normally reply to review, but I just had to here. Yes, you're right ... especially lately I've encountered a few people who won't take no for an answer and who actually annoyed me to the point that I had to write a poem ;)

[Luke L]

well I can respect not taking no for an answer on some level, I like hardheadness, but I think with women that is not an effective approach, and probably gets you in a lot of legal trouble :p

[Audrey Rey]

It gets you in a lot of legal trouble or ... it gets you in a poem ;)

[Luke L]

ha oh THAT'S how you get famous :p