Nectar of Youth

In the lusty green background, 
There stands a flower,
Painted in the colour of love,
Flaunting her curvy petals, 
Adorned with crystals of water.    
She brightens up, 
As the mighty sun compliments her. 
The gentle wind caresses her beauty 
And spreads her intoxicating fragrance.    
The vibrant leaves dance around her, 
Desperately trying to woo her. 
She smiles at those poor leaves. 
But a little bee wins her over, 
And drinks her nectar of youth. 

Reviews

[Solar]

Was it the busy bee that got the flower, while the rest were like 'lilies of the field, they toilet not'?

[Devashish Kumar]

Out of the mighty sun, the gentle wind, the dancing leaves and the little insect - the insect is finally able to impress the flower. The idea is that a girl does not go only for smart guys and sometimes they are looking for 'something'.

[Solar]

something true in that - i suppose the choice of word 'insect'' conjured up image of termites/worker ants whereas the mighty sun, etc were free-spirits of nature.

[Devashish Kumar]

I didn't mean that way. What I meant that insects, little insects are able to impress the flowers. Why the flower chooses the insect is open to interpretation. There can be n number of reasons- be it his playfullness, his refreshing company, appropriate space between the two, his propensity to 'work' more than others.

[Solar]

That is true - it could have been any of those aspects. Perhaps if instead of the word insect, the word bee had been used, it would have opened more meanings to me as a reader.

[Devashish Kumar]

Okay. That makes sense.

[Solar]

welcome - was just sharing - but you did the right thing as 'insect' is open-ended.

[Kass]

This is a really good short story/poem. I love the strength of the person! Thank you and good luck!