Shamans Vision

a vision of mine in a deep trance

In a trance
The man would sit
Traveling through space and time
When he reaches his destination
He finds himself in the Indian's dance
He sits upon the rock
Like a shaman in deep thought
The Indians dance around him
In their ritual of inner sight
Then fire roars
And in it he sees
All the futures majesty
He sees love
Sees music
Happiness
Then tragedy
After he sees his insights
The fire soars
And the Indians scream their cries
As colored smoke fills the lands
And in the smog the vision clears
Awakening he finds himself in tears
For his loved ones
And for years to come

Author's Note

reviews pls

Reviews

[Holly-Marie]

Beautiful. Wonderful imagery and intense. Brilliant.

[Kon™]

I love the image and the scene that you created, it was wondrous and fun to read. The Indian dances, the fires and smoke, I loved this dream you portrayed. Keep it up! :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Good job. :) I love it :P

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

This is such a wonderful dream although sad it is happy as well the connection of spirits meeting in dreams I am a believer.

[victoria]

i lovee this. the image you created was amazing, and i really enjoyed reading it. great job xD

[The Last Poetic King]

Yeah man defiantly in a past life you were a full blooded native american no doubt about it.

[The Perfectionist]

Futures should be Future's

This is probably the strongest structural poem of yours I've seen, but interestingly it seems to come at the cost of your usual masterful imagery. As always, I was able to follow along with a picture in my head, but this time it felt like I was looking at a series of pictures rather than immersed in your world. It doesn't have the punch of the rest of your poems, but I enjoyed it anyway.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

very good, love it.

[Lilly]

very nice piece. you have created some great images. i love the hopeful sort of tone/feel to this piece especially that which is created in the lines,
"Then fire roars
And in it he sees
All the futures majesty"

great job

[Kaelyn Shea]

great job! :)