Tearing Hearts From the Sky

short poem

she helped me
she loved me
then she hurt me

she held my heart up high
just to tear it from the sky
all for another guy

Author's Note

comment? i feel this is unfinished but idk i like it short

Reviews

[Moth Phoenix]

Awww =/ this is really meaningful poem. I know where you're coming from. I like it short too. Great job!

[Tiarra Templeton]

This is short, but I really enjoy it. Very to the point and easy to relate to.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I enjoyed it. It is perfect the way it is. I really loved it.

[The Last Poetic King]

pretty short man, but to the point

[Lilly]

i wouldn't lengthen it at all - if you did you'd probably end up floating around the idea and it wouldn't work like it does here
one other comment though - second stanza first line -should it be 'hurt' or 'heart'?

anyway - good job :)

[The Perfectionist]

It's short.

What? You want a real review? You're blunt, completely to the point, and complete in your idea. Don't lengthen it, it's fine as it is. To add more detail would only defeat the one selling point. You don't have anything Earth-shattering here, so let it stand on the merit of being the most direct example of one of the most told stories in history.

[HorrorMaster]

Good broken heart poem. I like it.

[victoria]

i think its better short. i like poems when they are to the point more than loge complicated ones. the idea in this poem is very relateable, and i liked it very much. great write :)

[c.m.]

I wouldn't make it any longer. It's too the point and beautiful.

[Bette]

this is to the point. don't make more with waisted words. this is what you interned?? then leave it be. well done