Thanks for the Better Day

a poem from a friends point of view when she had a hard time and i was there

Thanks for the better day
Thanks for going out of your way
Thanks for being a better man
A better man then the rest of us

You got off of your path
You abandoned your task
To shine a new light upon mine

You were the grave digger
Dug up the grave
That I fell in

You were the friend i needed
To pull me out of this hole that I dug

Thanks for being there for me
When no one else was
When times are hard
I am glad i have you

Author's Note

reviews pls and o see this being a song one day

Reviews

[MoonlitAngel]

In the line, "You was the friend i needed", was should be were.

This is an incredable poem, and an even more amazing song. This would be really interesting to here in song form. As in, I wonder what beat would go to it. I can match this poem with a couple of people that I'm close too. Thanks for sharing.:)

[The Last Poetic King]

Good job man, I enjoyed this thoroughly.

[Lilly]

i think this would make a sweet song - you could add more but i really don't think it needs it - it could just have some great instrumental solo to lengthen it (guitar i'm thinking...)
there are some spelling and grammar mistakes but "The Perfectionist" has already mentioned that...
your friend is lucky to have you there for her when she is struggling

[victoria]

i liked this. your friend must have been very happy, for you to help them. aside from a few spelling mistakes that dont really matter, this is good. if you made it a tad bit longer, i could totally see it being a song :]

[The Perfectionist]

Spelling and grammar mistakes, wee.

"You was the grave digger" should be "You were the grave digger"
"Ypu was the friend I needed" should be "You were the friend I needed"
"Thanks for bwing there for me" should be "Thanks for being there for me"

This would either be a short song or a very instrumental one. I can see the musical version of it (and sorry HorrorMaster, but metal does not lend itself to this), but I think you'd need to flesh it out a little more before that. Also, if this is you writing from a friend's point of view, you look very arrogant. :p

[HorrorMaster]

I love this. It will be a great song also. It better be metal.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

i love this, it will be a beautiful song

[Bette]

okay i am not good with editing and i absolutely suck at spelling but i found a few words that you need to correct."Ypu was the friend i needed" i am sure you meant YOU WHERE. then "Thanks for bwing there for me " i am sure you meant BEING. other than that it was a great write. correct those before anyone else sees.

[LeeLee Ryder]

The 2nd verse nicely demo's the phrase:"What are friends for"...
TFTB illustrates your strength of character.. True blue friendship
is something to cherish and your friend surely does just that..
Sweet and lovely write, Hip ...
LLR

[QuietPoet]

I like it. You should add more to it, if its going to be a song. Friends are always great to have during rough times. I enjoyed this.