Feast on Their Pains

i thikn im going to take a couple poems just like this in mix it to one epic one

Tear the smile from her face

Carve the hurt in her soul

Break her spirits

Just to fill yours

 

Drink her tears

Feast on her pains

Feel good about yourself

You glutinous basterd

 

Fill that hole in your heart

The only, worst way how

But its ok, its all human nature

To destroy others to better yourself

 

Aren’t you glad to be human

Author's Note

its similar to someother peices id like a review

Reviews

[Charles]

First, 2 technical things: its should be it's in line 11 and b*****d is the correct spelling. Otherwise this short poem is short on metaphor... that's OK because you use words/phrases that are strong enough without embellishment and project powerful images (carve the hurt, drink her tears and so on). The flow is good, structure (shape and line length) match the topic well. You're not afraid to use a one-line stanza at the close - that's very good. Everything about the poem ias consistent - and that's good too. Good emotional release. Don't limit your writing to this subject or this style, though. You use 'regular' languge well in this kind of writing and should test your skills on other poems as well.

[ashley]

wow. this is amazing. just... wow. great job! :D

[Soul Magic✯]

wow you are definitely on point with this piece... there are some people like that. very well written...

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

this reminds of my ex , how he would treat me real bad... great piece

[QuietPoet]

I liked this. Very nice flow. Im thinking your talking about a man treating a woman badly. Happens all the time.. Nicely written.

[HorrorMaster]

Very good poem.

[Rhonda]

this was nice. keep up the good work.

[victoria]

although i hate the topic of this one, i think you did an amazing job writing about it :)well, i guess i dont hate the topic, i just hate how true it is. day in and day out i watch people being made fun of, just for there own pleasure. i try my best not to be that person, nevertheless, you did an amazing job writing this :)

[Moth Phoenix]

Well done =]
Couldn't have written a better one!!!!
Some people do feast on other peoples pains and it sucks worse than anything else in the whole entire world.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Whoa. There is a lot to be learned from this poem.
Many men should hear this. You have shown a lot
of maturity in your words. You seem to be able to
read people. This is a real wake up call.