Last September...

In the walk of life, we turn back and see what we have, what we lost, where we are and where we wanted to be. A poem I wrote on a journey in the train.

LAST SEPTEMBER...

The breeze...cold across my face
Touching my cheek, kissing my neck
The fire...frozen in your heart
Thunder in your voice, lightening in your eyes

Do you remember?
Last September...
You told me, you won't leave me ever
Now that you've gone, gone away forever
I never thought this would be, no, no never!

The tears...dried on my face
My eyes in daze, my stride in pace
You look at me from behind that book
And talk about me like I'm not there

Oh, do you remember?
Last September
You put the ring on my finger
You promised me, you'll never leave me
That I'll always be in your embrace

No I won't forget
But I'll forgive.

In this fall...I'll be standing tall
No, I'm no doll
of circumstances
I'll forgive, but I won't forget
All of our past dates
Parties and dances
and all those awkward glances
All are gone
This September...

Those dreams, now only screams
Once sheltered now left bereaved
Under the open clear sky...

xoxo
Rucha

Author's Note

LAST SEPTEMBER is based on two people, Vipra and Nikhil, two angels in my life.
A relationship worth envy, a flourishing career and a beautiful life ahead of these then 22 years old young couple.
Something happened, fate took a U-turn and with her vicious smile ended it all...
I wrote the poem on a fair October afternoon on my train journey reminiscing past days.
Rest in Peace, Vipra, you were one young and beautiful soul and thanks for sharing with me the best of your short but sweet life.
Peace.

My other poems are currently taken down.

Reviews

[epicwriter87]

in a similar situation myself. not calling it quits yet, but after four years, my wife and I are engaged in a rather sensative balancing act, as i've made clear in my poems.
now to address your poem: in my personal opinion, when you pour your heart into a poem, i don't think you can write a bad poem; but perhaps you can write better poems as your thoughts become better organized in time.
your poem has a clear message that's easy to read:
memories were made
with the love displayed
but a price was paid
happiness did fade
i'm not a great critic either, so i just speak my mind

[Author Rucha Joshi]

Thank you and I'm glad the message was clearly understood!

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

The beauty and sadness conveyed by this poem is truely heart warming...Good Writ

[Author Rucha Joshi]

Thank you so much Kenneth!

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad story in the poem.
"No I won't forget
But I'll forgive."
Forgiveness must be given. Hard to forget. A powerful poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Author Rucha Joshi]

Forgiveness transcends the soul to the higher level...

[Coyote Song]

Very well written poem. Impressive work here.
The ale is a sad one but it seems part of many lives, none the less, the pain is a great one.
Any such tragic loss is.

[Author Rucha Joshi]

Thank you so much for the review @CoyoteSong

[The Black Warrior]

This is nicely done

My fav. lines

No I won't forget
But I'll forgive.

Forgiveness is a powerful thing!

Thank you for sharing

~Suk

[Author Rucha Joshi]

Thank you so much for the review! :)
Forgiveness indeed liberates us from all the bondage!

[The Black Warrior]

That is very true Ivory! thank you for sharing such a eloquent poem!

[Joe Gibson]

I enjoy this poem a lot, I recently wrote a poem called that night which is based in September of a similar concept, you should check it out if you'd like. I also enjoy the deepness the symbolism provides on an emotion scale. very nice work!

[Author Rucha Joshi]

I surely will! thank you

[SANTANU CHATTERJEE]

Beautiful poem. Well organized, well thought out creation. As I am not a good critic at all but to speak the truth , it is awesome to me. Eagerly waiting for the next work.

[Author Rucha Joshi]

Thank you so much! Even the words of praise can be motivating!

[Zahra]

Nice poem, feels like a song. Well expressed..... :)

[Author Rucha Joshi]

Thanks for the comment!

[Moonie]

I really like how you've incorporated the feel of autumn in the poem. I couldfeel the blowing orange leaves, the inky skies, lined with platinum clouds that thunder and roar at night... the feel of a love lost..of a relationship spent...the memories, the apologies, the empty promises... rather like the september rains...

[Author Rucha Joshi]

Fall brings in so many things, feelings...
like you 'fall' in love and you 'fall' out of it!read moreFall brings in so many things, feelings...
like you 'fall' in love and you 'fall' out of it!