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I found myself singing these lines and I think they're nice

 I know you want to fight on your own

 And baby it's fine, but I'll come along

 I'll be there when everything is done

 To carry you, carry you back home

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Aesthetically and musically, it would be more powerful if you have a line breath after "To carry you" and then have the next line start with "to" as well, so it would look something like this: "To carry you/To carry you back home". This is fantastic, in every other way! Short and powerful! Well freaking done!

[Avia]

Thank you very much. Your reviews are always helpful and I look foward to them. Your corrections motivate me and help me become a better writer. I really appreciate it.

[emipoemi]

just doing my part :)

[Unspoken poet]

such a powerful little write here, I really enjoyed this. I would have like to heard more, I feel a melody to it. Awesome writing skills.

[Norbanus]

In the fight you know is coming
and the battered hunk you'll find
there may be but one solution,
that's to hang on and be kind.

[Avia]

Nice :) Thanks for reading.

[wordman]

beautiful sentiment,you will be there

[Najam Us Saher]

These lines make me feel that you are selfless. I liked this.

[Avia]

These are lines I want someone to tell me sincerely. That kind of love. Thanks for taking the time to read all of my work. I really appreciate it.

[Najam Us Saher]

It is my pleasure reading your works. 😀

[Tony Jordan]

This is like a modern aria Avia.

[Avia]

Thank you. Tbh, i had to google what aria means. Thanks for the enlightenment

[anonymous_at]

well it will surely feel wonderful if someone was to sing these lines to us....i mean to have someones back is really a good backup....nice lines....

[Avia]

I agree. It would be amazing for someone to say all that and actually carry it out. There's nothing like knowing someone's got you. Thank you for reading

[anonymous_at]

Ya .....you are right.... BTW it was great read

[Zoya]

A reassuring read. Nice one, Avia.

[Avia]

Thanks Zoe. I'm glad you liked it

[Zoya]

My pleasure

[Matthew Kult]

Playfully Heroic. Gently sweet

Great read.

Matthew

[Avia]

Thanks Matthew :)

[Matthew Kult]

You are welcome

Matthew