Her

About domestic violence

Slowly, I feel myself slowing down

The vibrant, restless, bubbly girl, is almost all gone now.

Each strike, each hit, each broken bone, took a huge part of me.

The scars hidden behind makeup that only I can see.

I used to feel such beautiful things, love so true.

But this monster that lives in your eyes, has torn me away from you.

The tenderness and sweet caress, all that I've yearned for.

Are now dirty slaps and blackened eyes, and echoes of slamming doors.

Reviews

[Mavericks]

Domestic violence is so rampant. Doing of the weak people. Narcissism. Women have been taken for granted from ages. But, thanks, to the various Self help groups and NGOs to work for the Women empowerment. Your Poetry has captured it really well. I hope every women would take a stand for herself by being part of various campaigns and fight for their rights.

[Avia]

Thank you Sid. I also wish all women would realize that they have the right to stand up for themselves and each other. It's very sad that sometimes when these things happen, other women criticize the woman that she must have done something wrong rather than defend her safety and dignity. So sad

[Nolo Segundo]

Real love is not easy to find for man or woman-- trust in God, seek that guidance--it worked for me,and I had once been an emotional cripple.

[Avia]

Thanks a lot for the advice and the review

[PandaPeaceful]

Your words demonstrate the importance of fighting for one's right, and that shows true beauty. Honesty slithers past every line, creating thought and emotion. Well done!

[Akash gaikwad]

The poem will take the reader through what you feel...it make a reader feel the bruises..Thank you for sharing..my only suggestion is for starting line...slowly slow...doesn't make sense because slowly is plural of slow....also in your next line you have added slowing down that means you don't need to add slowly slow. Thank you I hope I was helpful.

[Avia]

Thank you for reading. I'm glad you like it. I'll look at the poem again with your corrections in mind. Much appreciated :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You have painted very touching images of two sides of a same girl. Emotional and painful.

[Avia]

Thanks dear😊

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

i applaud you for writing this poem i understood its meaning loud and clear.
thankyou so much for such a raw honest but beautifully written piece of work thanksxx

[Avia]

Thanks Julie 💜. This means a lot.

[emipoemi]

in theme, this is a gem. Polish it up in certain areas regarding unnecessary punctuation and issues in musicality, and you've got yourself a gem. That last line is killer.

[Avia]

Thanks. I always appreciate your criticism. I'll do what I can to make this better, the other one too.