Whispers of the Quiet Sky

“Whispers of the Quiet Sky” reflects on the silent search for truth in a world that offers no clear answers. It explores the contrast between dreams and reality, light and darkness, and human strength

"Whispers of the Quiet Sky"

A drop of thought in the human mind,
We search for truths we’ll never find.
The stars don't speak, yet still we yearn
For silent answers that won’t return.

A breath, a blink -- our lives unfold,
Dreams, more real than the truths we're told.
We chase the light, we flee the night,
Not knowing both are shades of right.
Wherever we've gone, we'll not return.
Back to reality that made us burn.
Still, we held our heads up high,
Refusing to look at the paths behind.

Author's Note

"I corrected this poem with the help of a dear friend, who kindly guided me through the grammar mistakes I had made."

Reviews

[Buddhistboy73]

This is a great flowing piece about man's search for truth in a world that offers us no real "answers"....
So I guess it's up to us to find our own "truth"......

I liked the lines:

Still we held our head up high
Refusing to look at the path behind.....

Thanks for sharing this poem,.:)

Feel free to stop by and review one of my poems...

BB73

[Coyote Poetry]

The below lines. Honest, powerful and true.
(A breath, a blink -- our lives unfold,
Dreams, more real than the truths we're told.
We chase the light, we flee the night,
Not knowing both are shades of right.
Wherever we've gone, we'll not return.)
I understand the above lines. We are seeking the light and trying to escape the darkness. Thank you dear Ayesha for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Ayesha Faiz]

Your kind words are much appreciated! Thank you, Coyote. :)

[butterfly]

This is a beautiful poem. I hear whispers of the quiet sky so vividly. Also yes, I also am refusing to look at the paths behind. I can definitely relate. Nice work here!

[Ayesha Faiz]

Really appreciate your kind review.

[Emunah June.]

There is something so beautifully gentle about this piece. It holds a mirror to myself, the nights where I clung to Hashem's garment and begged for answers I knew were mine to find. We forge a path despite uncertainty.

You do an excellent job at reflecting the relationship between forging ahead on our own, and awaiting answers from the light we've chosen to follow. It is an inherrently human journey, and we're all on it in one way or another. Its something that has been written about time and time again, but you've managed to make it your own. Exceptional, and enjoyable.

[Ayesha Faiz]

I really appreciate your words. Thanks alot for stopping by and reviewing my poem. I am really glad that you felt a connection to it, it makes me happy. :)

[Kady R.]

Hiii Ayesha!!! I love the part "Still, we held our heads up high,
Refusing to look at the paths behind." Being stuck in the past is so easy to do but it's no longer real but just a memory something that cannot be moved. Its great to be able to live a day at a time like that not looking behind but ahead.

There's so much to ponder from this one. It seems like the world turns and the animals do things by instinct but we have the ability to make choices freely and how thats done it totally up to us.

Thanks again for sharing Ayesha!! 🤗🤗🤗

[Ayesha Faiz]

Thanks again Kady for stopping by to review my poem. Yes, past is just a memory, an illusion that's no longer real but still it haunts people throughout their entire life but it doesn't mean that one should give up. We have freedom, and thanks to that we have plenty of options to chose from. We just need to keep moving forward. Once again, I really appreciate your thoughtful reflection on my poem!

[Kady R.]

Welcome Ayesha!! 🤗🤗🤗

[Richard🖌]

Beautifully rendered work, Ayesha 🥀

Thank you for the friendship request … gladly accepted.
It is a pleasure to read your work, and the privilege to critique it for you, a distinct honor.
As a teacher of poetry, you'll find my reviews to be not only encouraging and expressing enjoyment, but instructive.
For instance, your skilled use of metaphor, emotion, and imagery vividly reveal how you use your mind, heart, and soul to express thought, feeling, and compassionate understanding of human nature, with a maturity quite rare for a writer of such youthful years … along with a meaningful message of insight most of your readers will easily relate to, including me. And, with spot-on rhymes and line-breaks, your latent skills are quite evident.
First, I love the strong eye-catching title, and your introduction lends an authenticism that helps the reader avoid ambiguity. And, though English may not be your first language, you voice it quite fluently … far better than many for whom it is. Still there is room for inspirational flow and diction improvement in a young writer's earnest efforts, as illustrated below.

"Whispers of the Quiet Sky"

A drop of thought in the human mind, (omit "human's" and add "the")
We search for truths we’ll never find. (excellent line!)
The stars don't speak, yet still we yearn …
For silent answers that won’t return.

A breath, a blink -- our lives unfold, (beautifully spake)
Dreams, more real than truths we're told. (omit "being" and "the")
We chase the light, we flee the night,
Not knowing both are shades of right.

Wherever we've gone, we'll not return. (consider "we've gone" &"we'll not")
Back to reality that made us burn. (omit "the")
Still, we held our heads up high, (add a comma "," after Still and an "s" to head)
Refusing to look at the paths behind. (add an "s"to path)

Note: To be rid of the �", avoid using "dashes," as the font system here does not recognition them. Instead, consider a hyphen - or, two -- or an ellipsis … or a plain comma ,.

Ayesha, I welcome you to the Café and hope you'll stay to learn, sharpen your skills, make lots of good friends, and gather many admiring fans. Call on me anytime you might need a friendly hand. 😊

It's been a blessing to share your excellent poetry and to enjoy how beautifully it was gifted to our eyes, minds, and hearts.
Smile and the world smiles with you! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Ayesha Faiz]

Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging words. It's because of people like you that I feel motivated to keep going and continue writing new poems. I'm also very grateful for your help with correcting my grammar — I’ll make sure to work hard on it and be more careful from now on. And yes, I also hope to make many good friends and receive lots of support along the way. You too Richard! Always smile and be happy! Once again, thanks alot! I really mean it by heart. Thank you for making time to stop by and make someone's day better.

-Ayesha Faiz

[Richard🖌]

Ayesha,
You are most warmly welcome. 🌿

Perhaps, you might now use those helpful corrections to make this poem the radiantly brilliant masterpiece it deserves to be.

Thank you, too, Ayesha! ⁓ Richard 🙏

[Ayesha Faiz]

I already did. I really appreciate your help and time!

[Richard🖌]

Beautifully done, Lady-Poet!
You make it all deliciously worthwhile 🍎