Beautiful Mess

Just a simple poem about life. Nothing too deep, nothing to special, I just want to thank you, with all of my pleasure.

Beautiful Mess.

Where should I go? What should I do?
Nowhere to hide, no path to pursue.
Life is a book, with chapters so bright,
Reading is fun, but I lose my sight.

I saw someone, shining like gold,
I thought he was strong, fearless and bold.
But then I realized, I was wrong,
He was just there to mourn all along.

I feared to see through all the lies,
Yet somehow, it ended up in a sweet surprise.

I am shocked by how people think they can copy others' answers,
Not realizing that life has given them different question papers.

I don’t know what I'm trying to be,
Except that it's a strange melody.
I don't know if this is a bless,
I just know that life is a beautiful mess.

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

Modern poetry is more apt to use slant rhyme than true rhyme especially with end rhyme. Internal rhyme is more prominent in poetry now than genuine end rhyme and structure.

[Ayesha Faiz]

Yes, true! Modern poems use more near rhymes and rhymes inside lines. They don’t always follow old rhyme rules. Thank you for your words. Appreciate it.

[Pete]

it sure is. quite true and honest. we never know what the next chapter will bring. nicely said.

[Ayesha Faiz]

Bunch of thanks for the kind review.

[JessyJacob]

Very beautiful lines. Thank you for sharing to read

Jessy Jacob..

[Ayesha Faiz]

I appreciate your words.

[Emunah June.]

"I saw someone shining like gold.
I thought he was strong, fearless, and bold.
But then I realized I was wrong.
He was just there to mourn all along."


The poem itself is melodic and rhythmic in nature, but this line in particular really struck a chord with me, mostly I assume due to my work in behavioral health. We live in a world where we are all trying to be more than what people see -- a mixture of glimmer and grief. We are hope and despair in a lopsided package and we're all the more interesting for it. Its a striking paradox that you capture beautifully in your words, creating and overall enjoyable read.

[Ayesha Faiz]

Thanks alot for your thoughtful words Emunah June. Really appreciated.

[carl]

we each have a book to read and it is ours to experience one page at a time and not become overly angered or swayed by others who question our particular genre of choice and want to recommend what they find enjoyable, enlightening, or frightening - I speak metaphorically of course - many excellent lines in your work - "Life is a book, with chapters so bright, Reading is fun, but I lose my sight. " We all often lose sight of where we are in the book and where the end will take us. - My piece "Turning Pages" is an attempt to address this same subject. - be well and safe - carl

[Ayesha Faiz]

Thank you so much, Carl. Your words really mean a lot. It's so true that we each have our own story to read and live, one page at a time. I’d love to read your piece "Turning Pages." Be well and safe as well.

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Awww. So sweet. I felt these quotes, kinda remembered my old poems and feels so alive. I can sense behind the meaning of questions.
"I am shocked by how people think they can copy others' answers,
Not realizing that life has given them different question papers." What a great thought! That's so true. Advices seems so awkward to me, advice from whom to who? We all have different lives. Even siblings are different than the each other, even though they have the close DNAs and same parents, same environment. We are all different and we all have our own questions and answers.
I love this poem so so much!!! Can't wait to read others from you!

[Ayesha Faiz]

I'm really touched by your words. It means so much that my poem reminded you of your own feelings and memories. You're right, we all have our own paths, questions, and answers. Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts with me! 💫

[Betty Hermelee]

when you’re in awe of someone or in love, one tries not to see the lies and secrets… but sometimes they inevitably come out… which makes one confused….” i just know that life is a beautiful mess”….
Warmly, B🌷🌷🌷🌷

[Ayesha Faiz]

I really appreciate you stopping by and reviewing my poem. Thanks alot Betty. 😊

[Betty Hermelee]

My pleasure...
Warmly, B