Predator and Prey

This is describing conflict between the hunted and the huntee. I didn't really choose the words carefully, they just came to me.

There will soon come a day,

For face off of predator and prey.

They will circle, left to right.

Each waiting for the action to take flight.

Thus the violence will not come.

There they'll pace until the day is done.

For the wait, there is no ending.

Yet, still there is no truce pending.

A battle cry does never take place,

So there they stand, face to face.

Author's Note

I reallly am not sure where this came from, but do you think the concept behind it is good?

Reviews

[Lexi Nicole]

Yes, the concept is very good! I enjoyed this poem, you did a really good job with it!

-Howl

[Melissa Kesead]

I think the concept is very good and the poem flowed nicely. There is a constant battle between hunted and hunter and it shows up in many different forms. Good write!

[123456789]

I really enjoyed your poem. I can not wait until you submit more writing. I love the concept of the enemies just facing off...waiting for the first strike....I can actually picture it! Wonderful! Have you thought about writing a book?

[Some Person]

I really like it, but you should change "came" in the fifth line to "come." I think it was a typo.

[Ivey(:]

I like this,
the ending was great
good job.

[Alaska Frost]

yes, the concept is good. I like how you ended it, too.
I actually thought it was a pretty good poem! :)
In addition to describing the external conflict, you could also describe the internal conflict.
-Alaska Frost