Fables

quite straightforward... i think...

Monolithic constellations, faced us infinitely

The birth and death of the day,

Cursed us all and we were bound to death.

Forever living in these tombs,

We exist in these skeletons that once promised us life.

 

Burst apart and let the constellations know,

The trickery of life, the sorcery of their lies

That the only escape from these coffins,

Is not through their fragile stairs

But don’t let your guts spill out-

 On your fall from the top.

 

Beseecher, truth- seeker know the fables you are fed

Know the facts that have been corrected and forced in your head.

 

Author's Note

this is about a year old, but i think it still has some good to it... i think...

Reviews

[Terohime]

I loved it, It was a great piece of work. Keep writing.
~Your friend Res

[Azriel]

thanks a lot res, taking the time to review this really does mean a lot to me.

[Terohime]

Any time. i am glad to give feed back to people and help them any way i can. ^^

[Jake Botha]

Great word use. Paints a forlorn picture of the world and how not everything is cracked up to be.

[Azriel]

thank you for your review, and yep that's the general gist of the poem

[Chase]

I enjoy the thought and meaning you put into this. I feel like you could make a very good poem from it if you worked on it a bit. You said it's an old one so maybe if you revised it now you could make a version more satisfactory to yourself and your fans.

[Azriel]

thanks a lot, really appreciate what you had to say... and i am considering re working it, nevertheless glad you enjoyed it.

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~ it's an important message... glad you posted this piece... ~ because of some rather compelling reasons, i've been researching the tools and techniques deployed for brainwashing... and i can confirm that "fables" and stories that sound like "fables" are used a lot... ~ it takes a lot of effort to remember facts and not get influenced by the wrong kind of fiction...

[Azriel]

yep, a lot of the things we think are "innocent" are actually used for "brainwashing" us to think a certain way. It's always something that's good to be aware of.

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~ absolutely...