The way we are

We live like shipwrecked souls, lost,
But not at sea, 
And we search for a light to guide us

To carry us to a place we can call home. 

We live like divers, jumping off every cliff,

But with nothing at the bottom

 And with nothing to break our fall. 

It's like we're biting glass to break the silence,

Only to find ourselves hurt

And the only impact we've made,

Is the bloody wounds inside our mouths.

Inside our heads are worlds of hurt

That we've cast unto ourselves.
And we burn our own skin, in hope that we can be purified, 
Just like the unbroken glass once was
 But it never works and this is how we love.

 

Reviews

[Terohime]

It is true love is dangerous and it can hurt you at time, but that is what we desire at times. Some one to hurt us so another can come a fix the broken pieces, the one we all call our soul mate. Keep up the good work.

~Your friend Res

[Azriel]

hmm that is quite an interesting way to look at things, never really did consider it that way... but it is quite true... again thank you for your kind words, res.

[Terohime]

anytime ^^

[Eddie Phillips]

You wrote some startling images of pain. The poem speaks of hurt and resolving it with the way you love. Some people hurt so deeply that their ability to love is warped by the hurt they experienced. I love how you put those feelings to words. I also like the optimism you used in the beginning of the poem. It shows that you feel hurt but you are optimistic about love. Sweet poem!

[Azriel]

thanks eddie, i'm glad you were able to pick up on that, it really is how i fell, or at least felt while writing this...

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Good read and write.

[Azriel]

thank you.

[Chidoriflower]

This seems painfully truthful. Almost suicidal. But very lovely. Awesome!

[Azriel]

thank you for your review, really do appreciate it, glad you got that from it as well.

[jwesley]

Don't know that I agree with your conclusion, but I definitely enjoyed reading this. The flow was smooth and real and it was worded very well. Have read several of yours over the last week or so, and overall like what I read.

Stick with it.

j

[Azriel]

i don't even know if i agree with my conclusion... but it's how i felt at the time... nevertheless i really do appreciate your kind words j... really means a lot coming from someone as skilled as you.

[Dhaye]

So emotional. The way we were...we loved and then lost...then tried to stand again. But to move on is not that easy because we have the scars of our past...like a broken glass we want to reform. That's love...and that's the way we love.

[Azriel]

thank you and im glad you were able to pick up on that...

[Dhaye]

:)

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~ you write extremely stark images using an extremely poetic vocabulary... reading you allows one a view into this skill and how you excel in it... ~ i don't agree with this philosophy at all... but that doesn't, in any way, make me closed to the idea of reading this poem and appreciating its beauty... excellent work... thank you for sharing your talent on this site...

[Azriel]

thank you serah, your words really do inspire me to write more and write better as well. also i don't view this as a philosophy at all, it's actually about an isolated incident, but i can see how it may be interpreted to represent a philosophy. nevertheless thank you.

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~ you're very welcome... i'm really glad the my central message of wanting you to treat your talent seriously always gets through to you... ~ thank you for sharing your notes... i think it's the sheer power in your words that actually resounded like a philosophy... ~ as you practice more and learn more, you'll learn the art of wielding that power precisely as you want to... enjoy the process... you have the gift... you should just let your words flow... celebrate the freedom of expression... :)

[Azriel]

thank you again serah, your posts are always so inspirational to me.

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~ my privilege... :)