Untitled Story of a Ghost

Your figure still appears at night, 
Frozen in my mind, frozen to the touch of time. 
You linger here for far too long, 
Just as your damning past did you
While you were here.
And just for a second we see your face 
But then you flee, just like you always do.
You strange spectral person,

Who are you that haunts me in my sleep? 

And as I pull further away from you, from your memories, 
Amnesia strikes me, in my veins

Restricting my body of every feeling that was supposed to be felt
But that can no longer be felt
Just like you can no longer be touched.

Now at night these thoughts plague my mind 
And you have me wondering,

Where my ghost has flown off to 
Or have I become the ghastly presence myself? 
Have you haunted me enough-

 For me to become as dead as you are to me? 

 

Reviews

[Eddie Phillips]

Azriel I enjoy your imagery so very much. You have a gift for painting pictures with words. That is not a small thing to achieve. This poem was haunting and dark because it was so well defined by the words. Keep writing. I see more and more confidence in your poetry. I like how you yoke words together to get a distinct meaning that works so well in your poetry. Keep it up!

[Azriel]

thank you eddie, you have no idea how much those words mean to me.

[Eddie Phillips]

I only started sharing my writing over the last year. I have written for years but I was hesitant to share what I wrote. Poets and writers are here to illuminate others. You have a unique gift. Share it with others. I love your writing and I want you to know I connect with it.

[Azriel]

thanks again eddie, the fact that you can connect with my writing is the greatest praise i can ever receive. also i wholeheartedly agree with what you said, since i started sharing my writing here and reading other writer's work i have been more productive in writing than i have ever been.

[A.E. Surdam]

Nice imagery. Haunting. Great write.

[Azriel]

thanks :)

[Just Kim]

Very nicely written. enjoyed it

[Azriel]

thank you :)

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~ sweet... i don't really believe in ghosts so i'm not able to get spooked out... :P ~ but this is very well-written... very earnest... and the flow is exceptional... :)

[Azriel]

haha, not sure if i believe in ghosts myself lol... nevertheless thanks serah

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~ you're very welcome... ~ centuries ago, when i was a little girl and i thought God was a person (:P)... i prayed to God for almost two years... asking him to introduce me to just one ghost... (:P)... i begged and i begged and i begged... but God didn't facilitate the date... (:P)... so i don't believe in ghosts... your poem reminded me of that time and i giggled... :P ~ so, thank you for all the giggles you sent my way... :)

[Azriel]

ohh, well i'm glad this poem was able to remind you of that.

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:)