Drifting Into The Winds Of What Could Be In Life

Drifting emotionally

Into The Winds

Of What Could Be In Life

Jet Streams of formalities

Blowing constantly

Take forms of

An enlightenment wind

A prosperous wind

A devastation wind

A destiny wind

A conspiracy wind

A sinful wind

Blowing social winds

Swept away

All of the populaces

Demand

For being intuitive

With the origins

For why the occurrences

Of these drifting social winds

Have come to pass for

Making an impact

Changing and Shaping

The populaces exact

Future outlook on life

In light of today's yesterdays

While anticipating

What's yet to come

In the midst of

Yearning for better days

Lying within

The next drifting surge

Of omnipresent

Daily social winds

Being held at bay

For What Could Be In Life

Reviews

[Scarlet Alice]

I like how you wrote that kinds of wind. built it up very nicely :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

First, the images created in this one are beautiful, and qutie unique..."jetstreams of formalities" and "the light of today's yesterdays". Some great lines. There are a few grammatical issues, which could easily be fixed, and the flow seems a little on the choppy side for me, in that it's one long stanza with really short lines. I couldn't get into the rhythm that I wanted to when reading. Still, I quite liked the idea and the imagery in this one. Nice work.

[Lucy Morningstar &heart..]

theres a bit of a grammatical thing when you first say 'a enlightenment wind'...would be much better served if you changed that one to 'an'...anyways, this is a really wonderful poem and I am glad I got to read it :D

[Rogue]

The slow and gradual build you maintain throughout this piece to the end is extremely good. It's just a great job overall and one of your best, I believe, so far. :)