Sentiments Of A Soon To Be Dying Leaf

I can't believe

I'm withering away

Beyond disbelief

With no disarray

Without enough sun or water daily

 

While growing under

A decrepit tree

Scorching heat & humidity

Have vaporized my oxygen completely

Within its entirety

 

Presently now

I'm surviving off the

Last malignant & remnant

Stage of a rare

Leaf deformity

 

By nourishing normally from

Comprehensive wind gusts

As nutrients

From the soil

Have kept away the rush of

A rare & intermediary

Form of decay

 

That's now a dying aspect of

A dry & withered concept

Beyond a foreseen belief

Unfolds a lasting testimony of all current

Sentiments Of A Soon To Be Dying Leaf

Author's Note

Experimenting with complexity and a new found theme. All reviews welcome. Thanks for stopping by and enjoy.

Reviews

[KeelyJane]

I loved the theme and the wording but the format had me staggering. The flow would work better I think in a more basic format in my opinion. But I love the substance of this piece. Thanks for sharing.

[s y e]

This is such an intriguing, interesting write! I loved the use of alliteration and your rhymes. It feels so sad, hence your title but it's stunning! :)

~ Noodle.

[Kristin Lee]

This one just feels so sad, let alone the title. And yet, its absolutely beautiful.

[Dana Alsamsam]

taking the persona of a dying leaf is very intriguing! you use alliteration and subtle rhyme in a very fun way. great experimentation here!

[SyberRose]

I love the way you experiment...and enjoyed reading Bp...Rose