Beware Of The Kingdom You Shall Inherit (A Poem Within A Poem Version)

Your evolved parents

Took the loving time

To initiate your induction

Into a special

Heredity Kingdom Of Sorts

Deeming you as

Their prestigious prince or princess

Bearing a contemporaneous last name

Within the royal family court

Were ruling power

To profit & export from bartered wisdom

Transcends solidarity

Reticent to a structured governing order

Bearing more light to a sight

Of the king's indegenious

Castle's fort & lowering draw bridge

Inside the courtyard

A evident throne will reign

Over every peasant

Yet Beware Of The Kingdom You Shall Inherit

Without merit

A crumbling empire

Cannot withstand

Disloyal subjects

Breaking a chain of command

Represented by a pure bloodline

Of recipients

Who'll keep the royal courts wheels

Turning to a point

Where respect & recognition

Will forever remain synonymous

In respect to the preceding

King & Queen's vision

Of a prosperous & generational law abiding kingdom

Author's Note

I'm still experimenting with the italics, another poetic journey within itself. All reviews welcome thanks for stopping by and enjoy. Don't let the length of this write scare you away. :)

Reviews

[Kristin Lee]

another very interesting one. You've got a strong metaphor at play here.

[Rita L. Sev]

I like the metaphor and message, and still digging the style of "poem within"...

[shallimarRose]

"You Shall Inherit
Without merit
A crumbling empire
(that)
Cannot withstand
Disloyal subjects"

Great theme and presentation.. thanks for the rr Sarah.. xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not too long..and a well kept theme, with the italics giving us a poem within a poem.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Yet Beware of the Kingdom You Shall inherit -- great line...very fitting to the piece.

I like the questioning of this one, and the way that you played out the moral idea from start to finish. You are a master when it comes to latching on to a topic and staying with it all the way through. I enjoyed this one.

[RainDancer1997]

I think the length was just perfect:) great job!

[Nick.B]

Interesting poem and love the fresh concept...great job