What Truly Constitutes Having A Nice Day

You've heard

This phrase

Time & Time again

Have A Nice Day!

But What Truly Constitutes Having A Nice Day

Since no two faces

Have the same pair of eyes

Sharing a perception

In contrast to

Befriending sunrise's

Daily paradise

Picture a 24 hr inlet

Revealing a unadvised keepsake mirage

It's reticent

Yet, Would you react this way?

If found a winning lottery ticket

Or after

Enjoying a visit from

Your favorite friends

In the purest sense of a word

Called commemorative

Like a precious photo moment

During your lifetime

Before boarding that flight to see

Those exotic & luxurious places

Forever remembering

A living oasis

Bearing a wondrous simplistic essence

We all love

Seeing a gracious & greeting smile

That's more precisely viable

Than being joyfully loud

Amongst strangers

In a way this type of jubilation is

What Truly Constitutes Having A Nice Day

Author's Note

A creatively profound type of write. All reviews welcome, thanks for stopping by & enjoy. :)

Reviews

[Leandro Mendez]

great write, thought provoking..
Since no two faces

Have the same pair of eyes

Sharing a perception

very well put, great write!

[Dana Alsamsam]

i don't think people even realize what they're saying anymore when they use that phrase! but really a nice day could be found in the simplest of things. today i tried a new tea and surely it was a nice day. i liked the idea behind this piece!

[Frieda P]

Such an overused phrase, sometimes it spills out of people's face and they don't even look at you....like your slant here, a good day would follow a full night's sleep, after that it's all cake! Good one Bpoet.

[Aramey]

Excellent write. I do believe the second stanza is my favorite, though it was hard to choose. Thank you for sharing :)

[shallimarRose]

Loved the last of this the best.. To many saying Have a nice day means really nothing at all.. A way to get out of an awkward silence perhaps.. Like when someone asks "how are you today?" and you say Fine thank you.. but inside your soul has a hole eating through it.. You want to get out of the way of the moment so you just say.. "fine thank you" Just my thoughts..

Have a nice day Brian... lol... Loved it.. xoxo

[Pryde Foltz]

For me it's feeling loved and knowing that the ones I love feel the same way too. That and wine; wine helps. Nice write.

[shallimarRose]

lol pryde... :)

[Pryde Foltz]

:):):):):):)

[kublakhan27]

I probably have more nice days than I realize...I like the way you articulated this philosophy, nicely done :)

[Rita L. Sev]

That is so often an empty phrased tossed at us by strangers - "Have a nice day". As you point out, that means something different for each of us. Your last stanza gives a clear and unifying interpretation of that phrase.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

What constitutes having a nice day...I think it is different for all of us. Because, as you described, we all have different perceptions, tastes, relations, etc., my "nice day" might be a horrible one for you. I think your "point" is clear in this one, though I have to admitt that (unlike most of your writes), it took me several reads before it really became clear to me what you were trying to say. I think some of the language might be throwing this one off just a little bit. Overall, though, point well made, and well taken...have a nice day :)

[Hilary Adams]

I enjoyed the sentiment of the opening stanza, though I have to say that I sort of lost the thread of meaning about midway through the second one. There are a couple of grammatical errors that may be jarring for a reader or leave them perplexed as to your meaning. For example, the lines "Picture a 24 hr inlet/ Revealing a unadvised keepsake mirage/ It's reticent/ Yet, Would you react this way?" A couple things are somewhat unclear to me: first, what do you mean by a "24 hr inlet"? I can't really picture it if I'm not sure what it is. Second, the words "unadvised keepsake mirage" don't mean anything to me. How can a mirage be unadvised? How can it be a keepsake? And how is it reticent? This poem is very adventurous in its diction, but beautiful words are only as impactful as their context allows them to be.

Because I don't want you to give up on this work - I truly believe it has the potential to be a great poem - try writing it using slightly more basic language so that your intent is clear. Then, once you are able to focus the poem, try substituting more colorful and dynamic vocabulary, ensuring that it still retains its meaning.

There is quite a bit of poetry that uses the sounds of words rather than their meanings to convey a message. Gertrude Stein was a notable example of this kind of poet. Is this what you were trying to do? If so, ignore everything I just said. However, if your intention is to provide the audience with a more easily discernable message, you might review the diction to enhance clarity.

Like I said, I think this work has brilliant potential. Just keep practicing and try to find that balance between clarity and diction.