Vault Of Pain (Version 2)

It's a strange lock combination

Unlocking contradictions

Haunting twenty hour souls

From sunrise to sunset

This torment of disbelief

Exposes regrets

As a toll taker

Within the realm of human life

This crushing plight

Will never go in vain

Until it's unleashed

From society's wicked

Vault Of Pain

Author's Note

Version 2 of the original. All reviews welcome, thanks for stopping by & enjoy.

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

This crushing plight
Will never go in vain
Until it's unleashed
From society's wicked
Vault Of Pain

Suffering is the bane itself. Really great write, Bpoet.

[Austin Fern]

Very good. The second half flows so much better now and makes for an incredible read. Very good revision and a very good poem.

[OneDayIFellAsleep]

Well... It doesn't really have much of a story. It's basically just random words, but um... I used to write like that so I won't judge. It's just my personal preference for a poem to have a little bit of a story to it. Overall, it's alright.