Untitled.

(make your own individual name for the poem after reading it) id like to see what comes to your minds after reading this

The moon is vibrant tonight

Shimmering as usual with such poise

It seems to almost tempt me

To drift out my window and

Be high with her

It's trance roused me and

With a quickness

I was up there, with her

The sight was too livid and pure

Even for my seen it all eyes

To go there again, I couldn't bear

Thoughts of going back

I do long to be with her again

 

Reviews

[The Scholar]

Wow everyone is coming up with such interesting names.. Lovely poem. Made me feel as though I were up there with the moon myself. Too bad it's 3 o'clock in the afternoon here... I'll have to read it again at night to get the fill effect.

Ya, I'm bad with titles. I think I'll pass on this one. I like the "Longing" idea though, something along those lines would work. Great write.

[Dean Kuch®]

"Serenity with Selene"
I really enjoyed reading this. I took my laptop out on the porch, in the moonlight, which made the topic of your piece even more appealing.
As for the "Title", just tossing one out there because you asked us to...

[Layla J Omorose]

Beautiful poem, I felt as if I was dreaming as I star gazed at the moon. Actually I was doing that last night when the full moon was out...Beautiful poem... what would i tittle it......hummmm "Goddess Moon"...or maybe "Tempest Moon". I think you have just inspired me to write a poem

[Kuhr Gred]

:) GREAT WRITE BMColey! I like it.. very much.. moon is the best way to illustrate a poem with deeper feelings and expression :) thanks for sharing
- Kuhr Gred

[Kelsy]

Nice and creative.I quite agree with Liderien's suggestion for the title.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. The moon is a motivator for many Poets. I like the desire of the poem. The ending was very good. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Deandra Dawn]

Beautifully written, lovely imagery. Nice job.

[BMColey]

Temptress would go with the idea of this...which is the moon being an ex lover. and its no prob lynn!

[ba_mcfarlane]

Great execution of a somewhat novel theme.

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hi BM, I am terribly sorry for not answering your request before now. I didnt realize I had requests until a bit ago. my computer skills suck! I have read your "untitled". It is a lovely :) How about temptress?

[Liderien]

I can feel the longing and the fantasy of her.
It pulls at your soul and rents the heart.
The torment of barren arms and heart
takes courage to keep.
I like "Drifting" or "Errant"