Soul Watcher

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Soul Watcher

 

I love when your eyes are open wide

And the sun fills the path with tender rays

So that I can see deep inside your soul

It’s not easy to get pass those pretty blues

 

Often I get sidetrack, by your other qualities

Like your freckles, your nose, and hair

That is not my objective,

 

For I’m a soul watcher, that’s what I do

Now and then, you give me a glimpse in your window

As I watch, you unlock the door with your golden key…

It opens with a web of disguise

 

 And along the winding road through your soul,

 Chambers conceal your most precious moments

For me, you share a panorama of you

Then carefully lock it away, and hide the key

Hoping that no one will ever see

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. such substance here.. very provoking..a soul-watcher... usually if someone is trying to hide something it is fear of being hurt.. usually because they have been hurt more than once.. you may see hints of their true selves from time to time as they most likely really want to be themselves.. but hiding for some unknown reason.. I try not to guess anymore about these types of mysteries .. when a person is ready I feel they will just be themselves! This world is a hard place and I feel everyone hides a little and lives behind the masks.. truly sad.. thank you for reminding me what I see in others everyday and sharing.. I can relate to you! =)

[TamiViolet]

This one is haunting, beginning with the title; I like that. But my eyes are brown, Ralphy. lol. Seriously though, imagery is wonderful. Those freckles! Cute.

So often we hide behind those windows, yes? Hoping for the one who really sees.

Gorgeous.

[deeps]

This is such a wonderful and so beuatiful write.
This is also kind of thought provoking if you think about it.
I like this. Very well written.

it has been long since I have read poetry, and this is bringing me back to reading poetry again.

This is an amazing masterpiece, short and crisp. Fully packed with an amazing message.

Great fundamentals

an amazing piece

[Ralphy]

Thank you for the corrections Taylor

[Taylor H]

this is a great poem

[Tallulah]

Wow that was a beautiful poem. I love the imagery. The flow was amazing too.
I love it.